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The Bribe - scene

The Bribe - a scene

Author - me (Fenchurch)
Pairing - McShep
Rating - PG
Rodney is John's slave - that's pretty much all you need to know!

The whole smoke monster thing will happen after this, but we all know how that goes. I just didn't want to miss out on this scene though. I am writing more, but it's taking a long time. I'd rather post it all when it's all done. Maybe I'll post the odd scene like this though - if people like...

The whole thing begins here if you want to start from the beginning of Book 1...!

This is totally un-betad - let me know if there are glaring errors please.


“No Rodney!”


“But Carson…”


“No, Rodney. Listen to me, please.”


“But I…”


“Everything OK Doctor?”


Both friends turned quickly to see one of the soldiers posted to guard the infirmary come into Carson’s lab, ready to intervene.


“Everything is fine, thanks,” Carson gave the easiest smile he could, under the circumstances.


“Shall I take him away, sir?” The marine nodded in Rodney’s direction and Rodney took a step backwards and bowed his head, as he remembered who he was and, more importantly, what.


“No, thanks! He’s under my supervision at the moment. You could get a-hold of Major Sheppard, though. I left my radio in my office.”


The marine smiled, crisis averted.


“I’ll do that then, Doc.”


Carson breathed a breath he hadn’t realised he had been holding, and put a hand on Rodney’s shoulder.


“You’ve got to be more careful.”


Rodney nodded, ruefully. “I forgot.” He looked up at his friend and his face was a picture of misery. “I’ve been spoiled, Carson. I’ve got you and I can get away with all kinds of things with the Major and Dr Zelenka is amazing. He really doesn’t seem to care that I’m a slave.  But I really want this. If I could only manipulate the Ancient stuff myself, I could do almost anything!”


“I’m sorry, Rodney. I’d use you in an instant if you were free, but… I have no idea if it’s really safe and…” the doctor lowered his voice. He wasn’t happy to admit this part. “I don’t think I could survive slavery.”




“If you… anything happened to you… I’d be enslaved in your place. You know the rules. I can’t do anything unless your master agrees.”


“Is… is that why you called for him?”


“Aye,” Carson’s brows rose in question. “Why? What did you think?”


“I thought… I thought you were going to punish me.”


“You’re obviously not that spoiled,” Carson mused and then, seeing Rodney’s puzzled expression, added. “You don’t seem terribly worried about punishment. Or even about me betraying you.”


“You have no choice. If you hadn’t reassured that marine, I’d have been dragged straight to the punishment room.”


“You’re not… worried?”


“It’s pain. I can live without it,” Rodney shrugged, but he didn’t raise his eyes.


“What’s up Doc?”


They both turned to see Sheppard emerging from the corridor.


“Aye, that’s gets funnier every time, Major,” Carson rolled his eyes and John grinned.


“So? What’s up?” John leaned against the counter. “Rodney? Have you been upsetting nurses again?”




“He wants the gene therapy,” Carson explained.


“You’ve got it working?”


“I think so. It’s nothing like FDA approved and I could be struck off for even suggesting this, but Rodney wants to try it.”


“How safe is it?”


“It hasn’t killed off any blood cells yet and the gene seems to just slot itself into the genome. It’s just that it doesn’t behave like any genetic cell structure I’ve seen before. It’s more like a… a computer virus than a recognisable DNA structure.”


“What would normally be the next stage in your research?”


“Well, normally it would be human trials next, but we haven’t any… I refuse to just use slaves. We don’t have any to spare anyway.”


John smiled at this. There were plenty of medical researchers who thought nothing of trying out their potions on life convicts like Rodney had been. Rodney was protected, now, by his status as a personal possession and John suddenly felt a tide of protectiveness wash through him.


John signalled to Rodney, who obeyed and knelt at his Master’s side. He was supposed to do this anyway, according to protocol, but, whereas before it would have been a chilling humiliation, now it was pure pleasure. His Master’s hand rested affectionately on his hair and Rodney sighed happily.


“Would it harm him?”


“I’m about 85% sure that it would be painless and barely noticeable.”


“And the other 15%?”


“Most likely there would be a rash and some flu-like symptoms… and maybe the urge to run in a little wheel and eat cheese.”




Carson’s dimples made an appearance as he grinned at his own joke. “Mice seem to possess the gene naturally. It’s all part of the process.”


“It won’t kill him then?”




John looked down at Rodney’s beseeching face and nodded. “You promise he won’t be harmed?”


“I promise, John.”


“Thank you Master!”


John tugged his slave to his feet and pushed him in Carson’s direction.


“You’re going to watch?” Carson asked.


“Yeah. I want to see him trying to fit in the cage with the wheel! Should I alert the Mess and check on cheese supplies?”


Carson rolled his eyes again and Rodney just hopped onto the bed and rolled up his sleeves, beaming.


“It might not work,” Carson warned.


“But think if it does…”



It was a disappointingly easy procedure. Just a simple injection that made Rodney say “Ow!” as though the doctor had been particularly brutal.


“Well?” John asked. “Just squeak once for yes and twice for no.”


“I don’t feel any different.”


“Well, you won’t,” Carson explained. “It’ll have to take effect first. You have a whole DNA structure to rewrite. Why don’t the two of you go and sit quietly somewhere for a couple of hours?”


“How will we know?” John asked.


“Just touch something,” Carson shrugged. “Go and ask Radek if he has any gizmos you can practice on. But leave it at least 2 hours.”


“Come on then!” John beamed. “Let’s go and take some time off!”


“I’ll need to go get a ‘gizmo’ first,” Rodney made air quotes.


“OK. Lab then quarters, but I’m coming with you to make sure you don’t get stuck into some work.”


“Yes Master,” Rodney sighed as though put upon, but he was grinning too widely to pull it off properly.

Yay! There's a book 3 link now! Here!


( 36 comments — Leave a comment )
Mar. 30th, 2011 09:19 am (UTC)
C'est un moment parfait, j'adore l'affection de Carson et la réaction de John. C'est même tendre et intime comme scene, duveteux, Rodney pour une fois depuis trop longtemps est prit en charge et aimé et ça fait du bien de lire ça.
Mar. 31st, 2011 09:09 am (UTC)
Oui, tu as raison - il fallait lui donner une experience plaisante avant ce qui va lui arriver...! Merci, et a bientôt!
Mar. 30th, 2011 05:08 pm (UTC)
I hope you're able to post more soon. I'm really enjoying this series.

My biggest question: When will John admit he's in love with Rodney?
Mar. 31st, 2011 09:16 am (UTC)
I think there's a way to go before John realises he has feelings for his slave! John and feelings....! I think he just feels very protective at the moment and Rodney has a bad case of hero-worship! I'm on the next book, but I want to have it mostly finished before I start posting...

Thanks for sticking with me!
Mar. 30th, 2011 07:52 pm (UTC)
So there WILL be a book 3! Yeay, yeay, yeay! *doing a silly dance with the plot bunny*
Mar. 31st, 2011 09:17 am (UTC)
Yes - there will be a book 3 - eventually... Thanks for enthusiasm!
Mar. 30th, 2011 08:49 pm (UTC)

I really like this series, and I'm so glad you are still writing more.
Mar. 31st, 2011 09:18 am (UTC)
Thank you and I am getting there... slowly!
Mar. 31st, 2011 12:04 am (UTC)
I love how much you've had Rodney relax as he feels safer. He's got an increasing number of people not treating him like a slave. Dare I say I'm enjoying him treating Radek with respect?
Mar. 31st, 2011 08:39 am (UTC)
I don't suppose it ever occurred to anyone that the way to make Rodney respect Radek was to take all of Rodney's power away and let Radek give a little bit of it back to him! I love Radek! I love all the characters who see Rodney for who he really is - it's why I can't quite like Sam or Jennifer - Sam just doesn't get Rodney and Jennifer wants Brain Damaged Rodney!

Thanks for commenting!
Mar. 31st, 2011 12:34 am (UTC)
\0/ Yay, more Bribe fic! My favourite part is John showing his affection for Rodney. I still really, *really* want Carter to get what's coming to her, with Rodney being massively compensated for the wrong done to him. And of course getting his happily ever after with John.
Mar. 31st, 2011 08:35 am (UTC)
It will happen eventually, but... well, there's quite a bit more story before they get to go home! I couldn't possibly abandon my boys mid story for ever!
Thanks and I'll get on with writing...!
Mar. 31st, 2011 04:29 am (UTC)
OMG, I lurve this series so hard! And now I gots the hankering for seeing Rodney on the exercise wheel, being tempted by yummy cheezy treats... LOLZ!

Write moars, write moars! ::sad puppy eyes, whimper, whimper::
Mar. 31st, 2011 08:33 am (UTC)
I don't think anyone has written an AU where Rodney gets turned into a mouse by the 'mouse gene' - that would be fun! Thanks for reading and I'm working on it - it's just even slower now that my daughter has started walking! (Oh boy!)
Mar. 31st, 2011 09:53 am (UTC)
Love this series ♥

I'm so glad you posted a snippet XD And yay, gene therapy!
Mar. 31st, 2011 11:37 am (UTC)
Thank you! I got into a bit of rut over that episode - it's been retold so many times - so I finally decided to just skip it and keep the bit I really liked - the bit that would play so differently in my universe! The whole Brave!Rodney thing will have happened, but I want to move on in Book 3! Stay tuned...!
Apr. 1st, 2011 12:22 am (UTC)
Definitely will be! :D
Mar. 31st, 2011 12:15 pm (UTC)
Oh happy happy happy......and can't wait to see how you write the smoke monster/I shot him tag.......

Mar. 31st, 2011 12:37 pm (UTC)
Thank you! Actually, I wasn't planning on actually writing that bit as it wouldn't be any different to what happened in canon. I may do the aftermath...

Thanks and I'll keep writing!
Mar. 31st, 2011 03:11 pm (UTC)
BTW - I loved your icon and I love the little tongue waggle that happens in the next second on the show!
Apr. 1st, 2011 02:56 pm (UTC)
I just found this series yesterday and am quite enjoying it! From what you've written, it looks like you're working on Book 3. Did Book 2 end with part 8? Or is there more of that? I totally understand the wanting to post-in-a-chunk bit, so I'm just curious.
Apr. 1st, 2011 03:31 pm (UTC)
I'm glad you're enjoying this! Thanks for letting me know. I'm afraid Book 2 ends at part 8 this time, but I am working on the next section - let's call it Book 3! I span Book 2 out for ages by posting as I wrote and I'm going to try the other method this time - write it all (mostly) then post. Thanks for your interest and I'll try not to let you down!
Apr. 2nd, 2011 03:57 am (UTC)
Thank you for writing more!
Apr. 2nd, 2011 07:53 am (UTC)
It's a pleasure! Thanks for reading!
Apr. 2nd, 2011 05:03 pm (UTC)
The Bribe Scene
Thank you for this bit. I love these stories and am constantly on the lookout for new parts. I will await the next with baited breath!
Apr. 2nd, 2011 10:32 pm (UTC)
Re: The Bribe Scene
Thank you very much and I will try to oblige as soon as possible... Just give me a little time...!
May. 12th, 2011 01:29 am (UTC)
Just realized I never commented - a lovely scene and I'll look forward to more, :).
May. 12th, 2011 10:12 am (UTC)
Thanks and I'll try to write more soon...!
Jan. 31st, 2012 12:39 am (UTC)
Jan. 31st, 2012 07:42 am (UTC)
Ta very much!
Jan. 31st, 2012 01:53 am (UTC)
A new part - a great surprise. Love John and Carson being protective of Rodney and Rodney so anxious to try to the therapy. Lovely snippet.
Jan. 31st, 2012 07:47 am (UTC)
Thank you! This was a scene that demanded to be written!
Jan. 31st, 2012 02:17 am (UTC)
Love seeing more of this. yay
Jan. 31st, 2012 07:51 am (UTC)
Thanks! It's good to be writing again.
Jan. 31st, 2012 06:19 am (UTC)
oh boy, oh boy, oh boy! You're adding more! I remember starting this when you were pregnant, I think and I loved it. I liked your pregnant!Rodney series very much also. And now, look at your daughter walking! whoo, hoo. I had 5 sons, My youngest is 21, my oldest 31. Sigh, I miss those days soooooo much
Jan. 31st, 2012 07:57 am (UTC)
Re: Yay!
Thank you so much! Yes, I was pregnant and... she's 2 years old now! Amazing huh? She's a cheeky little madam too! I can only write when she's asleep and then I mostly want to sleep too... or read! Well, at least things appear to be back on track and there should be some more coming soon.
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